Look Up From the Screen - ID# 125
Neuqua Valley
Public Service Announcement
Entry Description
This is a PSA focused on how our society is dependent on social media. The message is supposed to encourage viewers to look at the broader purpose of life instead of being wrapped up in their screens.
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/23 10:10 pm - Nice opening shot to grab attention. Nice use of overlays to show the screen time. "Look up from the screen" over pretty shots is actually the opposite of what you want the audience to do. I was confused by the intentional jump cuts of the girl standing outside. All your shots are well framed and well lit. Good timing of your cuts.
- 2/26 12:57 pm - STORY: very impactful statement in our screen-addicted society. The contrast between the doom-scrolling in bed at night and all of the wonderful life outside of the screen worked great. PRODUCTION: some improvements in lighting, even when a scene is intended to be dark, could have helped your image quality. The opening scene was grainy and had a lot of image noise because you didn't have enough light. One trick is to use a small LED light, even a phone flashlight, nested in the laptop so it magnifies how much light is hitting your subject's face. The overlays of what was being scrolled on the phone was a brilliant editing move, cutting rapidly back and forth, coupled with the mind-piercing high pitched tone. The classical music and the montage of life outside the screen was great, though some of video quality was also obviously mixed.
Judge 1
Positives: Great use of sound effects and visual editing to show the young woman sucked into the screen. Very creative yet effective for telling your story. Awesome image composition and saturation for the outdoor and life footage.
Improvements: Graphics could have used a border so they were easier to read. Possibly not leaving the look up from the screen up so long...Then when it changed it would have been more effective and getting your attention.
Judge 2
Positives: 1 - the over lay of the girl's face with all the various screen images 2 - the use of the varied voices to convey white noise
Improvements: 1 - the video choices for the second part could have been more powerful (most were too wide and too general) 2 - end music was a little too flighty
Judge 3
Positives: At the start of the video, the scrolling and use of sound effects was strong and helped convey the visuals of social media.
Improvements: Although the message was clear, there was not a specific call to action such as tips or resources. The text on screen could have been stronger design-wise to support the message that was being conveyed. The ending compilation of clips could have been more diverse in the sense of camera angles and movement.
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