Carbon - ID# 32
Lyons Township
Movie Trailer
Entry Description
This is a trailer for "Carbon".
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/24 1:31 pm - This was a lot of fun and showed so many thoughtful decisions, I really commend the effort and the risk, it definitely worked for you all. A few amazing elements; the music worked so well and definitely helped build the tension and the world. Your sound design was fantastic and I really commend both the dialogue, the sound capture, and the music bed / music effects. Your acting was top notch and everyone committing to the bit helped build the world and keep me in the trailer. One note of criticism is on the story / plot and not the filming / editing. I couldn't really tell who Duke Carbon was compared to the man and then the stalker, it wasn't totally clear on the stalker taking the daughter and then Duke Carbon going after him, if that makes sense. Overall, great work!
Judge 1
Positives: -Emotional stakes: Parent's desperation is palpable. -Intriguing mystery: Disappearance hooks audience.
Improvements: -Context clarity: Unclear how photo connects to plot. -Character introduction: Quick backstory for Duke Carbin would help.
Judge 2
Positives: - There are a couple incredible shots in the trailer that shift into anamorphic widescreen and are very well-lit. - The music choice by "Il était une fois" is very cool!
Improvements: - The relationship between the "stalker" character, the daughter, the woman on a "date", and Duke Carbon is a bit unclear, as well as the "meta" element of Duke Carbon starring as Duke Carbon? - One area of improvement could be the sound mix and recording process. Some of the vocals are peaking when they get particularly loud, and the mix is a bit flat and muddies up some of the dialogue.
Judge 3
Positives: Good dolly shot into Duke Carbon reaction. Actor playing Duke Carban is decent.
Improvements: Watch your sight lines. Character don't seem to be talking to each other. Antagonist doesn't seem a credible threat.
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