The Renovation of Nickel City - ID# 80
Glenbrook North
Documentary
Entry Description
Nickel City has been a staple of the Northbrook community for many years and a major part of the childhood of many residents. As the arcade undergoes a full remodel, the General Manager and community members share their thoughts on the changes being made and how the remodel will impact the town.
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- 4/24 8:31 pm - You have very strong b-roll and create a real strong sense of the place right in the opening. As the interviews continue it's a medley of voices describing the impact of the place, without truly discussing that it's on the cusp of change or that it's being remodeled. It’s not really clear what the story is about at the get go.That means that the story structure is a little bit confusing. For example, when the interviewees discuss their childhoods visiting Nickel City, it'd be great to show them as young people, even if you don't have still archival footage of them at Nickel City, it would be fun to show them as youngsters with those that talk about taking them there. The key interview with the owner of Nickel City also is out of focus, unfortunately. This feels a bit more like a nat sound news package than a documentary.
- 3/31 8:21 am - Keepers: Nice work with your interview shots and set ups. The fonts and sound effects were also nice add ons. Great job filming broll of the arcade and getting a great mixture of shots. I have a really nice visual sense of the space, which is important since I've never been there! Improvements: From a story standpoint, it's not immediately clear that this arcade is reopening/remodeling. It seems like it's been open the entire time without interruption. So it's a bit confusing. I would have considered restructuring this so we know this up front and then get into the nostalgia, etc. Explore the decision to remodel more. How long as the manager managed this arcade? Does he own it? Does his family? What went into the decision to remodel, etc.? These questions make the piece more like a documentary and less like a news report. Also, be clearer with the concept of the nickels. Are all games a nickel? Some games? It's not entirely clear in the story. You have good broll of the space, but let's see some of your interview subjects within that space. Lets see some of the kids playing the games, the manager doing things before/after hours, helping customers, etc. It would nice to see/hear some dialogue in in the broll shots to provide another way of telling the story.
- 3/4 5:54 pm - +Nice font choice, matches the topic +Good lower third font choice/design +Many interviews, which is great! -Don't keep lower thirds up once the person is no longer being interviewed on screen -I appreciate the natural sound, but this doc could benefit from adding music. -This seems more like a nat audio news package than a documentary
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