The Archives of Jason Grey - ID# 90
Glenbrook South
Dramatic Narrative
Entry Description
This is a story of a heartbroken brother searching for his missing sister, social media influence Jada Grey.
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- 4/21 7:53 pm - Ambitious and dynamic story aided by solid performances. However, it may have created a stronger emotional impact to shrink the timeline a bit – at times, it felt like the timelines being crunched into 5 minutes pulled me out of the story. The TV sound effect was unpleasant, and a bit too loud in comparison to the rest of the audio. One big question involved the time period, if the sister was an influencer, I couldn't help but wonder why the brother is recording on VCR. In general, the lighting aided the cinematography, but there were some issues with muddy lighting (light sources having different color temperatures). Overall, impressive work – I really enjoyed watching it!
- 3/19 9:29 am - Pros: Very interesting story. You did a great job editing this together. Your camera shots were overall good and your color was pretty consistent throughout. Cons: I would have that beginning clip use a different overlay, since you use it in your flashback sequences, at first I was lost in the timeline of your video. It seemed many of your shots were a bit dragged out and made the story long which lost my engagement about half way through. The audio was not balanced throughout which drew out my attention as well when it came to your levels from outside, sound effects, and pre-recorded effects. Try and have these all match in post-production next time.
- 2/21 12:51 pm - Using a tripod - smart move. Your "youtube" montage sequence is very effective. Your story is HUGE for a short, 5 min film. It is hard to do justice to the emotional arch of your characters and plot points. Also, your character announces that he is abandoning search and the film is a flashback to all the reasons why, but that does not happen. Sound recording is a little uneven - particularly outside.
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