Bronze

Get an Education

Oswego East

Commercial

Entry Description

This commercial highlights the downfall of not finishing school, so get an education!

Judge 1

Positives: The subject-matter, getting a college education, is a good topic.

Improvements: The message doesn't work. If we're trying to convince people to stay in college, why portray the kid who IS IN COLLEGE as being a total idiot with no compassion for the kid on the floor?

Judge 2

Positives: Good variety of shots. I liked the use of close ups.

Improvements: Lighting was rough. Audio could be a lot cleaner. Not sure portraying somebody bullying a homeless person is an effective way to get your message accross.

Judge 3

Positives: Lighting. Shot composition.

Improvements: I don't really understand your concept. Clean up your edits.