Bronze

The Confession

Lyons Township

Dramatic Narrative

Entry Description

The Confession is an original dramatic script about two guys who find their friendship in question when one of them reveals a secret.

Judge 1

Positives: Good subject, however could be developed more. Editing worked well.

Improvements: Conversation took place in one location - it could improve if the subjects were moving or more than one location; Final audio and sound mix could be improved.

Judge 2

Positives: Good story line. Good use of changing angles to keep the story moving. Didn't stay on any shot too long.

Improvements: Mixing of hand held shots and tripod shots within the same scene is distracting. Stick with one or the other. It appeared that a mic boom shadow dipped into the scene on one camera angle. Be aware of this.

Judge 3

Positives: Good job. I liked the ending. Storyline was good.

Improvements: Try to light in a more dramatic fashion. Also, use a few more camera angles for more viewer interest.