Bronze

Disappeared

Riverside Brookfield

Dramatic Narrative

Entry Description

A story about an average boy who experiences strange occurrences that heads to a dramatic conclusion.

Judge 1

Positives: Potentially a good storyline, but needed some character development; Good and eerie sound effects worked well

Improvements: The single POV camera became tired and erratic. Might of worked better with the POV shots mixed with an actual actor walking the room. Audio and sound mix could be improved

Judge 2

Positives: Good choice of music. The use of the echoing, reverbed voices helped to enhance the drama.

Improvements: POV camera shots worked, but it got a little old. Maybe some different shots showing the guy getting scared would have built the drama - through the window or from a hallway for example. Lighting the scene instead of using available light might have built the suspense.

Judge 3

Positives: Interesting. The storyline, music and sfx kept the viewer's interest. Good work.

Improvements: Seemed too long and the moving camera seemed too much.