Bronze

Breakfast

Glenbrook South

Dramatic Narrative

Entry Description

A cohesive family unit, headed by a stern father, sits down to breakfast before attending Sunday mass, but an unruly family member arriving late unveils an unexpected crack in the father's perfectionist armor.

Judge 1

Positives: Good sound mixing and audio in the dialogue was good; Nice opening sequence with the music and table action;

Improvements: Editing with cuts and dissolves were inconsistent and confused the story from a visual standpoint; Camera angles and editing were abrupt;

Judge 2

Positives: Camera framing and shots worked well. Good story line.

Improvements: Watch jump cuts and continuity - You have shots where the father has his cup up by his mouth and the next scene it's on the table. The audio was a little hard to understand in parts.

Judge 3

Positives: Nice job. Good mixture of camera shots. Nice lighting.

Improvements: Smooth out audio levels.