Bronze

"The Boy Who Took Action"

Eisenhower

Comedic Narrative

Entry Description

A comedy about a kid that feels depressed about finding true love and the girl that he meets ends up trying to help him find true love. The girl who tries to help him unexpectedly falls in love with him.

Judge 1

Positives: I really likes the Dr. Seuss-inspired rhyming and it helped carry along the momentum of the story. The lead actor choices were excellent...very subdued humor came through well.

Improvements: Some of the edits were choppy--better sound transitions could help that

Judge 2

Positives: The narration helped keep the video flowing smoothly. The scene pacing didn't leave you hanging, one lead to the next very well.

Improvements: The audio didn't match and was not cut together well. Some of the camera framing from cut-to-cut was a little off. Be careful not to give it a jump cut look.

Judge 3

Positives: Your script worked well and the rhyming gave it a nice pace. Your main character was a good choice. I was able to SEE what he was feeling in his face.

Improvements: The key to a good video is in the pacing. I felt like the editing could have been tighter to eliminate some of the brief awkward moments that appear. Taking a few minutes to clip out even a second from a clip can make a big difference in how your story flows. Also, it is important to balance your audio so some scenes aren't considerably louder than others. This is a process best done near the end of your editing process.