Bronze

Black Friday

Neuqua Valley

Feature Story

Entry Description

With Black Friday quickly approaching, I decided to do a story on two stores that don't have as big of a brand name as stores like Walmart or Best Buy. I chose to do a story on the stores Pacsun and Windsor, which is located at a mall near my high school. My story gives a brief description of Black Friday, and the deals these stores will be having. Enjoy!

Judge 1

Positives: cool visuals nice graphics

Improvements: interviews look too dark music mix too loud

Judge 2

Positives: Very crisp edit sequences! You were able to establish a very upbeat level of energy, and keep it strong throughout the piece. Also, very professional quality sound!

Improvements: If you're going to have the narrator appear at the end of the piece, be sure to have them start the piece off. It will appear jarring to the audience, otherwise, when a new element is introduced at the end of the video segment. Most pop music has sections or versions of instrumental. Be sure to use instrumental music during sound bytes, or lower the music so that it doesn't compete with what the subjects are saying.

Judge 3

Positives: Well composed locked-down shots mixed with hand-held shots kept a good pace. Good use of music/score to enhance visual story and pace of the piece.

Improvements: Editing could have been improved. Some of the hard cuts were a bit jarring. Overall, well done. More Shot Variety. Perhaps some more shots of customers in the store, transactions taking place, the customers in the mall, ect could help break up the shots and make the piece more visually interesting.