1st Place :: Division AA

Donati's Pizza

Lake Forest

Commercial

Entry Description

A look into the story of two former high school students who started a pizza place to solve an often complained about problem- nowhere to go.

Judge 1

Positives: Good video and I like the fact that you are using nat-sound throughout.

Improvements: Wenever see who's talking and it's one continuous sound-bite. Needs a little variety.

Judge 2

Positives: Nicely done. Good clean audio. Nice variety of shots.

Improvements: I'm not a fan of putting opposite camera moves back to back (ie pan left/pan right). The owner who is narrating, I want to see him talking for a few seconds. The 2 shots of the guy cutting the pizza....if you only put together 2 cut shots like that it kind of looks like a mistake, like a jump cut. Cut together 3 or 4 much shorter clips of him cutting the pizza with a very short flash between the cuts would make a great effect.

Judge 3

Positives: Very well done. Very clean shooting. Good shot composition. Editing was right on the mark.

Improvements: I would have liked to have seen the person that was speaking on camera for about 5 seconds to put a face with the voice.