Communication in Culinary - ID# 109
Morton East
Natural Audio News Package
Entry Description
This is a news package that highlights the importance of communication in a culinary arts kitchen.
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/23 2:23 pm - I absolutely loved your topic. Natural sound packages are best with topics like this. I felt like you missed opportunities to bring the shouting of those commands in the kitchen. Don’t be afraid to give me some more natural audio of people saying the words you are talking about. In addition, bring in some more natural sounds that would be part of a working kitchen (knives chopping, blenders blending, something frying on the stove). As for your story, try and give your audience some context to what your story is about, you just jumped right in and I didn’t fully understand what your story was about. I eventually did, but a sentence or two explaining how every industry has its own language, and a kitchen is no different…. Your story started very abruptly. Give me some time to digest what was heard. Your interviews seem to come out in a rapid-fire way. For example at 116 you are talking about knives, and then at 117 you turn the corner and are talking about using short sentences it moves very quick, but because it is so quick it is hard for anything to stick out because it all comes out so fast. As the story went on some of the interviews started getting redundant saying the same safety things we heard earlier. If you slow your story down a little bit, get rid of some of the redundancy, and pull in more authentic sounds and you will have an excellent story.
- 3/25 7:03 am - Good focus to this story - it's not something we think about when we think of culinary courses. The beginning of the first sound byte in this video was upcut - need to make sure that the viewer hears every consonant that is being spoken. At times, the interview with Yves is not in focus. There was a great opportunity to hear the natural audio of these words spoken in the kitchen setting that was missed. Put a wireless mic on one of the instructors and record them in the kitchen space - let’s hear them when they say “behind” or “heard” or other key phrases that are used in the kitchen space. This category is not just about the sound bytes that help tell the story - but it’s about how the natural audio from the b-roll is used to help tell the story as well. Put those natural audio pops in between sound bytes to help bring the viewer into the story more.
- 3/4 11:20 am - I love how the focus of this story was on communication in the kitchen! However, I was dying to know more context. Is this a student kitchen at a school? A professional kitchen? I felt like we needed a little more background information. I appreciated the story told by your interviews which were well framed and easy to hear. However, I wanted to hear more of the communication that was going on. Because we heard the interviews the entire time, this was hard to hear. I would suggest pausing your interviews and playing some of the awesome audio you could capture in the kitchen. For example, when the interviewee talks about using the phrase, "Yes chef," pause the interview and let us hear it. These moments will help to reinforce your story by not just letting us see what's happening but also hearing it!
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