LTXC State Sendoff - ID# 127
Lyons Township
Documentary
Entry Description
This is a documentary focusing on the Cross Country team's efforts leading up to the state meet.
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/13 9:06 pm - KEEPERS: You have some really great broll of the runners. It's not always easy to capture compelling coss country broll, but you did really well. Love the vibrancy of your colors and the slow motion capture also worked very well. The editing was for the most part well paced. IMPROVEMENTS: This didn't really feel at all like a documentary. It was more like a school promotion/hype video/news segment mash up. For it to be a documentary, the story needed to carry through more and your needed audio to go along with your broll. Lessen your interview subjects but expand your questioning to up the stakes. For this to be a compelling, stakes driven documentary, you needed to rely on broll with nat audio that captures the team bonding in practices and in meets. Let us HEAR the comraderie as well as see it. Your interview set ups needed to be more varied...especially if you're going to jump cut between them. The subtle changes in camera placement made them feel like mistakes. Also, consider putting each athlete on opposite sides of the frame as you shoot so the viewer has a different feel and perspective. Overall, this was a really well edited hype piece, but I'm not sure if it works well for as a compellling documentary. Keep telling stories!
- 2/25 12:42 pm - STORY: The story wasn’t necessarily clear. What is this about? This team? The sport of cross country? The individual runners? This could have used a voice over or an introduction, or even a text opening that illustrates what the focus of the documentary is about. PRODUCTION: Some great camera work and b-roll. Some shots that were overexposed and a few that were blurry or grainy. Looks like maybe you used multiple different cameras. The studio interviews were nice but you could have alternated the placement of the boys in the frame so that they weren’t all on the left. Great editing. Not sure about the music choices; the songs you used made this feel more like a hype video than a documentary.
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