New Athletic Conference - ID# 128
Deerfield
Natural Audio News Package
Entry Description
This year brings new challenges to all sports teams with the move to a new athletic conference with competitive teams from much larger schools.
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- 4/23 9:18 am - This is a personal thing for me but I always feel you should have at least a few seconds of broll to help establish what the story is about. Your piece begins with talking as it is fading up and barely gives me an idea to warm up and be introduced to your topic. I think it was clear in your head that this was a story about the conference change, but you never really came out and said what changed and why, more importantly, I started feeling like it was about cross country, and then suddenly there were football players! This story wasn’t bad, but as a natural sound package, I don’t feel you maximized the potential to draw your audience in. I wish you had more natural sounds within your story. Some of your shots could be adjusted in post-production (headroom of 3 football players, luminance of football coach). Great job tackling a topic that might not be super exciting, fix these small things and I think next year you could run away with a better finish. Sorry about the bad puns.
- 4/1 1:08 pm - Hard to follow this story at first. I get that you’re moving to a different conference, but not sure what conference that is. What does the different snacks in cross country have to do with the new conference? The cross country b-roll was shot from the same spot - the camera was just panned. Remember that this category is all about the natural audio and using that to help tell the story. While the interviews were good, how can you incorporate the natural audio from your b-roll more into the story and use that to help tell the story? That’s what this category is all about.
- 3/5 11:34 am - This was a really interesting story and I loved how you highlighted the perspectives on this move from coaches and students from 2 different sports teams. While you interviewed bigger groups of students, your audio was crystal clear! Since this is the NAT audio news category, I did want to hear more of a variety of sounds. I liked hearing the girls running, the football team practicing, and the football team running towards a cheer near the end of the video; I'm wondering what else you could have used to convey the "positive energy" behind this move to the CSL south. Perhaps you could have captured coaches telling their teams about it?
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