The Masterpiece - ID# 143
Glenbrook South
Comedic Narrative
Entry Description
A comedic narrative about two step-sisters who have to find a lost painting in order for the creative sister to be admitted to college. As they face various humorous trials and tribulations, their bond strengthens and they become not only step-sisters, but friends.
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/30 4:28 pm - Great and funny story! I loved the satire with the art teacher character. Great shot design and editing.
- 4/21 12:04 pm - Good script and story structure. Nice job creating multiple characters with unique personas, especially as shown by costuming. Camera and editing fit the mood. Overall good visual storytelling.
Judge 1
Positives: The camerawork and lighting was excellent in this piece. There was a great variety of shots that felt purposeful and were visually pleasing. In regards to pacing, none of the scenes felt like they dragged on for too long. This story was told efficiently and was easy to understand.
Improvements: In regards to the overall story, I feel like it could of been a better fit for a longer narrative (10+ minutes). It moves well, but the story feels a little rushed. Would of liked to has seen a little more visual storytelling as opposed to relying mostly dialogue.
Judge 2
Positives: There is a special type of aesthetic students embark on before becoming righted in film school. it’s that playing each shot, or beat out as you go, even regardless of story telling. Im really enamored by the raw talent I see here. Not worrying about coverage and not letting perfect be the enemy of good. I was really into the story, and the performances were driving in that framing of the lens; in sequence of the editing. Pure cinema. I stand proud to call this my favorite film of the festival. There is a certain tradition in the Chicagoland area in the spirit of John Hughes that the surrounding charm of the communities, the clever costume choices, the flag of Jack Kennedy, that gets whipped into the Weezer cover focus: all these devices create subtle enhancement and nuance in the mise-en-scene, that sometimes the filmmaker is subconsciously doing it. I see this great spirit in this film, most highly! Congratulations. This is my top pick!
Improvements: Im sorry, I have no notes of constructive criticism. Any misperceptions in scoring only means your best days are ahead ladies! Congratulations. I have a firm policy to not let perfect be the enemy of the good.
Judge 3
Positives: Great variety of characters, plenty of humor throughout, and genuinely very impressive overall! The quality of writing and acting was also a few steps above what I've come to expect. A lot of the comedy narratives I've judged were lacking an actual story or a marked change in a character/character arc. This film had it all! Loved the shot at the door where the painting is obviously in view of the girls, but he plays dumb. Great visual gag. Also really enjoyed the over-interpretation of the art piece, assigning value where there really isn't. Great parody of the real art world. You must keep making movies.
Improvements: I suppose the next step for filmmaking already at this advances teir would be a more thoughtful consideration of lighting. This is definitely a very involved, complicated thing in some cases. Also, not particularly important in this style of comedy narrative. But it will help to make your scenes more visually dynamic. Excellent work!
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