The Transit Man - ID# 156
Maine South
Movie Trailer
Entry Description
A man stuck on the track of his monotonous life and day job attempts to escape back to his passion of playing the piano.
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- 4/24 11:34 pm - Really solid concept, a Groundhog Day-style take on the monotony of everyday life is a strong foundation, and you showcase that repetition and routine effectively. That said, I didn’t quite see enough of why playing the piano is his escape. The idea is there, but it could use more build-up and emotional escalation to show his shift from a life he resents to one he's passionate about. Think about how you can use framing, composition, lighting, and color to contrast those two worlds. The monotony could feel cold, flat, and dull, while the piano scenes could be warmer, more dynamic, and expressive. That visual contrast would really help sell the theme of escapism turning into reality. You’re on the right path, just push those elements a bit further to make the emotional arc shine!
- 4/22 3:22 pm - The beginning pulls you in with the sounds of the alarm, commute, the closeups of the tracks, etc. There is some nice production value going on with the locations you used, the actor, and how you filmed your shots. When it comes to story for a trailer, it was a little hard to see what we would get in a full film. It was also hard to tell that the passion for piano was why he was getting frustrated with the monotony. There should be a big conflict for him that makes him make that choice, and that should be the fever pitch of the trailer. What can playing give him that his work can't, what can work give him that piano can't, and how/why/where/when can he or does he need to make that decision. Make it high stakes for him and tease that to us.
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