Behind the Pixels - ID# 16
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Documentary
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Documentary: a video game developer
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- 4/25 9:04 am - The documentary opens up being clear about the direction in which the narrative is going, but the visuals are not as strong as they could be for an opening. The title and the graphics are super compelling. Interview is tight which is fine, but I'm not sure why it is such tight framing and also the eyeline seems to be a little bit odd and he is centered. The story itself is very talky and relies too heavily on that dominant single interview. It would have been effective to have additional interviews and a greater sense of visual storytelling with more imaginative b-roll. In fact, there is not very much b-roll or visual storytelling here at all. I do think additional interviews and b-roll would have rounded it out even more.
- 4/23 9:04 pm - Keepers: Strong, graphic animation and introduction. Well done there! The interview was strong in terms of its content and messaging. He's well spoken and answers questions well and that's a testament to the production team. Improvements: Consider grabbing footage from the Lost Boy company, there online reel or whatever, to use as broll for the introduction. In this category that's allowed and it gives you a visual idea of the kind of work he does right at the beginning of the piece. From a story perspective, consider organizing it so that we can see his work and him working first and THEN get into his background and how he came into the industry. Overall, you needed a lot more broll of his work and of him working to cover the interview footage. You shouldn't have to use any dissolve transitions to cover the jump cuts in the interview. Use broll! I do understand that he's working on confidential stuff. That's fine. Have him pull up past projects and work on those or use footage from his reel. For your wider interview shot, consider placing the interviewer on the other side of the camera - it looks strange having him look to the short side of the frame. Your music gets stale after a while. I think this piece needs at least three different songs to cover it and since his work with Xenomorphs, the songs should be much more harsh and rock based than the song you used here. This would up the urgency and overall peppiness of the story. Watch your mix. The music is just a bit too loud.
- 3/4 7:11 pm - +good job typing the title graphic to the topic +interesting topic -interview framing is off. be sure to use the rule of thirds and tell your interviewee where to look -Audio has some hissing or static -A cam looks slightly out of focus
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