Girls Flag Football - ID# 164
Highland Park
Natural Audio News Package
Entry Description
Take a look at the successes that the HP girls flag football team had this season.
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- 4/23 2:55 pm - Your story starts very abruptly, you just jumped right into your first interview, give some context to your audience and introduce your topic to the audience. Mix up your locations for the interviews, the backgrounds for the girl's interviews were all the same and didn’t really help tell the story. Get out of the gym and mix it up so they are different. That diversity will pull your audience into your stories, when it is all the same they can look away, because they know they won’t miss anything. Because you are for the most part using game footage for your broll you lose a lot of diverse looking B roll and intentional audio. Remember this is a natural sound package so I should be hearing quarterbacks shouting, crowds cheering, teammates encouraging, and coaches yelling - the only real natural audio was the play-by-play announcer that bled through on some of the b-roll. Your interviews told a good story, and were pieced together nicely, just make sure the visual and sound effect follow that same standard of excellence you set for your story.
- 3/25 7:06 am - When using a lavaliere microphone, always have the person your interviewing put the mic on - they should not be holding it. At :15, instead of putting the picture in the corner of the screen, let’s see it full screen instead. Ava’s lower third was over b-roll. The sound bytes were good, but the key part of this category is to use the natural audio from the b-roll to help tell the story - it shouldn’t be told 100% by the sound bytes. Bring that natural audio up full in between sound bytes so that we can hear the coaches, hear the players, etc. Plan ahead and mic up a coach so we hear them coaching on the sideline, mic up a player so we hear them communicating with their teammates, etc.
- 3/4 11:21 am - It was great that you had so many interviews to support your story. One thing that I would suggest is having someone say the words "flag football" at the beginning of the segment. If I hadn't seen the title of this project, I wouldn't have known what it was about for almost the first 20 seconds. For the framing of your coach, I would zoom in a bit to reduce her headroom. You want to make sure you are making her the focus of the frame. I would also have your interviewees wear their mic- this will make your project look more professional. Overall, I wanted to hear more of this team! I loved the noise heard from the shot of the game- in a future cut, I would try to incorporate more of this. Think about the other sounds that come with playing ona team- coaches speaking, whistles blowing, cheer teams, ect. Think about what other sounds could have been used to tell the story of the season.
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