Journey For The Glasses - ID# 167
Morton East
Comedic Narrative
Entry Description
Potato Head goes on a journey to find special glasses that are worth a lot of money. He has a feeling that someone is watching him or even following him to the glasses. Potato Head finds himself getting chased after the glasses and gets put into a very unpleasant situation.
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/25 2:07 pm - Love the animation and great job on that. I like the story. This seems a little long and could've been a little tighter. I would've introduced the missing glasses at the beginning, so that the audience knew Mr. Potato-Head was missing them. I also think the chase and hallway scenes could've been shorter. Stop motion is very difficult so please think of this as a great accomplishment!
- 4/24 11:57 am - Excellent animation. Good job with framing your shots in interestibg ways. Lots of shot variety. Lighting, focus, and exposure looked great. The overall length of the video is too long, unfortunately. The music is much way fast-paced than the action, so by comparison the story seems to drag. Maybe changes in music or location could help this, but honestly I feel that would feel better at 2 minutes or less. Lastly, thanks for taking to effort to do a stop-motion! Keep at it.
- 4/21 2:19 pm - Music selection works well with the images you recorded. Good stop motion animation. Good variety of different camera angles throughout the video. Editing is well done. Good use of close-up camera shots. Great Comedic Narrative video. Very well done. Keep producing more videos.
Judge 1
Positives: Wonderful study in stop motion. That's a lot of work and you made Mr. Potato Head come to life. The grasshopper too. Nice variety of shots for visual interest.
Improvements: The story seems a bit contrived and there's no context for what they are doing or where/why they're going somewhere. Something like going out to get the mail or the paper or trying to get to class during a passing period would have given the hero a task and retrieving the glasses along the way some context.
Judge 2
Positives: It's a risky move using stop motion! but it looked really good and I give a lot of respect for taking it on. The physical comedy worked well as did the silent-movie-style dialogue titles. The story took an unexpected turn at the end and that was a pleasant surprise.
Improvements: The pacing was much too slow. It was cool to see the movement but most of the shots went on way too long to keep the viewer's interest. The story was hard to follow. I kept waiting for it to make more sense but it never really did. Also, the shots that weren't stop motion looked strange next to the shots that were. Might have benefitted from doing all the shots (even of the human shoes) in that stop motion style. But overall, a fun project to watch!
Judge 3
Positives: I know from experience that stop motion is an arduous task, and I applaud what must've been an immensely time-consuming effort. Very fun simple little story, paired with appropriately playful music!
Improvements: I'd recommend inserting a bit more humor into the narrative. Or some sort of character motivation. You only used a single instance of words on screen. I think you could probably have began that earlier in an effort to maximize on the comedy component. This was a ton of fun! Great work.
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