Looking Down - ID# 174
Glenbrook North
Comedic Narrative
Entry Description
A little nostalgic, but what else do you do on a sunny day? Well, looking up, might be easier than looking down.
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/30 4:55 pm - Cute story and great acting! I love that it was so simple and relatable. I loved all the different cuts of him trying to get up. I think it would've been funny to cut the music for when he discovered the stairs and then brought it back. Adorable and great job!
- 4/15 11:58 am - Excellent story concept! Good writing puts us in the mind of the character and you do that well. Great job showing things from a child-like perspective, and making his story matter to us. The audio could be cleaned up a bit, like removing the wind sound or playing with the soundtrack a bit. The ending feels too abrupt, even though there's a good joke there. All in all, this is one of the most original student films I've seen in a while. Nice work!
Judge 1
Positives: The narrative was cute, endearing, and was a good length. Didn't feel like it was moving too slowly at any point. The POV shot on the bridge was great. A lot of good wide shoots too that captured all of the action and blended well editing wise with the repeated attempts to scale the slides.
Improvements: At certain points the wind could be heard blowing into the mic and causing the audio levels to peak. I would recommend bringing a "DeadCat" microphone cover whenever you shoot outside. Would of also been nice to include some closeups in the film. Like a closeup shot of his face at one point to convey how he's feeling. It would add more variety to the overall coverage.
Judge 2
Positives: This is a good example of the filmmaker creating a three-dimensional space. I had a frame of reference for wherever the main character was at any given time. The job cuts in the editing were a nice touch. Also, the filmmaker ended the piece with very interesting visual ideas. He climbs to the top of the playground and can’t get down. Visually he is surrounded by bars, almost creating a jail effect. Thats very special because I can tell it WASNT intentional.
Improvements: Audio was a little low, and there could have been some more creative choices than just showing up with whatever you are wearing and shoot. But thats all nit picky stuff. Great job!
Judge 3
Positives: Charming short film with some great cinematography and great use of voiceover to add context and character. Pretty sure this young man did all his own stunts too. Great work!
Improvements: Capturing audio outdoors can be difficult, especially with factors like wind, and chattering people nearby. When the camera cuts, that audio always jumps around. I'd recommend recording some clean background audio somewhere peaceful and quiet. You can edit that into the mix, reducing or replacing the natural sound. That way you'll be able to maintain consistency with the sound design throughout. Fortunately, most of this film's script was delivered in voiceover, so didn't have to worry about dialogue and the complications attached to that. All in all, tons of fun. Keep making movies!
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