Spoonful - ID# 187
Tinley Park
Comedic Narrative
Entry Description
A cereal dater is accused of a crime
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/30 4:35 pm - This was a funny concept. The costuming , makeup, and props were well done and thought out. Some shots seemed longer than the others and could've been trimmed a little to keep the pace moving. The ending was unclear especially since it seems like Captain Crunch flubbed his line a bit. Was she let go? Her motives were unclear as well. I enjoyed the editing with song that went along with the film.
- 4/16 3:29 pm - I really loved the concept of this, and the cinematic style was well done. Some of the shots were out of focus and could have used a retake, but the ideas are all there. Well-paced editing and visual rhythm. Not sure if it was on purpose, but I expected the killer's issue to be "cereal first then milk" vs "milk first then cereal." Because of that, the ending was a little disappointing. Hard to say if that was an audience problem or story problem. Fun to watch either way!
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