Aerial Influence - ID# 2
Geneva
News Package
Entry Description
A look at a succesful Drone business
Copyright Info
Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/25 10:24 pm - Interesting piece but felt a little more like a commercial and less of a news package. Fun opening. Is all of the footage yours? If not, make sure to have a photo/video credit on the screen while it plays. Good audio on your subjects and throughout.
Judge 1
Positives: I like the use of the drone nats as an added element. I like how you had a variety of video to show what the interviewee was discussing. The length was great. Short and too the point.
Improvements: Be mindful of where you take video from and always source it. I'm guessing you did not create the opening shot. If all the drone video was provided from the company, make sure to source it as well. By this, I mean put a small graphic in an upper corner. I don't get the random music over the drone video. Was that already on the provided video or did you add it? It's distracting and seems unnecessary. Who is the other best friend? Is the man you interviewed one of the best friends? You could say "David Plummer and his best friend so and so started the company" or something like that.
Judge 2
Positives: -Excellent writing. Loved seeing the narration match the video. -Good use of natural sound to drive the piece.
Improvements: -there was a jump cut between the clip of the drone at :11 secs and interview with David Plummer. If you were trying to add a transition by fading to black, I suggest no transition there to avoid the jump cut. -some of the music transitions were a little distracting. Example: at around :17 seconds musical transition jumps
Judge 3
Positives: - I think the reliance on the 'Superman' quote is a neat way to get into this story. It's smart to weave that narrative throughout the entire story. - You obviously have great video of the drone. The varying perspectives of pilots, what they see, the thermal imaging -- it all helps to really illustrate the story!
Improvements: - While I like the 'Superman' theme, you need to be careful with copyright and audio use. I think including the music throughout takes away from the news angle and it makes it feel more promotional. - The editing of this package could have been better. There are fades to black, jump cuts on the interview and cuts that don't make sense. There were opportunities for sequencing with the drone pilots (wide shot, medium shot, tight shot) that would have made this easier to understand
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