Expendable - ID# 213

Neuqua Valley
Dramatic Narrative

Entry Description

Ricky Randall, a famous up-and-coming celebrity, is in the middle of the world-renowned game show: Shenanigans; however, when he notices some of the company’s corrupt practices and threatens to expose their schemes, the Host has other plans.

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Recent Teacher Comments

  • 4/16 2:58 pm - Dynamic and compelling opening. There are some issues with focus (such as at :58). Cool effect at :42 making sure the audience reads the part of the script you want to see. Good job with J & L cuts. There are some great creative shots, such as the reveal of the clone between 1:28 through 1:34. In general, very solid composition/framing! I think you clearly have an eye for camerawork, I would challenge you to use more manual settings and play more with manual focus and exposure to bring your work to the next level. Nice use of music to amplify the emotions and intensity. The through-the-box-holes compositions are really dynamic and effective. Nice use of aspect ratio to differentiate between the "real world" and the show. Overall, strong performances, well-written dialogue, and interesting story.
  • 3/13 3:05 pm - Very clear message about media vs. reality and being replaceable. I think your dialogue exposition lasted a little too long through - is there any way it could be told to us visually? Then right after that, the conflict between the clone and main character seems to happen too quickly. That part could be drawn out more to emphasize the importance of the scene. Good use of cutaways to the clone's POV - this was a great way to build suspense. Nice audio effect when the main character is trapped. Your sound design makes it seem like there is a full audience in the room. Really nice lighting on the main character when he's trapped. The light over his eyes is so cinematic!
  • 2/27 3:07 pm - The opening of the story is catchy, but the story feels a little flat. The stakes are not very high and the clone is a little random. The most interesting parts of the story are TOLD to us rather than shown us. Great sound design! I particularly loved the shot from behind the door, and you actually dropped the volume. Well done. I wish the shot of your character were in focus.
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