Building a Dynasty - ID# 224
Homewood-Flossmoor
Documentary
Entry Description
Documentary about Homewood-Flossmoor's basketball team looking to build a dynasty.
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/24 8:44 pm - Exciting footage that pulls you right into the story. The interviews themselves are very compelling, with interesting camera angles. A lot of the handheld footage is a little bit shaky and distracting, and the interview footage is a bit all over the map when it comes to color grading. The music goes throughout much of the piece and as such it doesn't allow for much of a narrative turn to occur. In fact there isn't truly much of a story built up here, but ultimately it's a thoughtful and heartfelt tribute to the team.
- 3/31 8:52 am - Keepers: Cool piece and I'm sure you're glad you produced it with the overall successes of this year's team. Definitely a keep sake for them! Good variety of interviews that tells the story of the team pretty well. Improvements: You need more broll - particularly during the first half of the documentary. More practice footage, more shots of the individual players practicing as they're being introduced via interview. Let me see the coach "coach hard." Let me see photos of players on travel teams that show they were together. Incorporate more natural sound from the broll so we can hear and see the hard work. Work on your lighting, overall. The interview with your head coach needed a light on his face to compensate for the large amount of back light behind him. Watch the rule of thirds and lead room on his interview as well, particularly with the secondary profile shot. The color grading you attempted is cool - it looks like you tried to create lighter wash on all of the game footage. It didn't land as well because all of your interview shots were too dark. The one thing I really wanted to see/hear more of was practice broll. Hearing the coaching, the encouragement, the hardships, etc. That's what fills out a documentary and makes it authentic. Keep working hard on developing these skills and improving your work!
- 3/4 5:58 pm - +I like the tight shot on the couch during the game--shows the intensity of the sport +Nice use of natural audio when they are cheering at the end. -I don't quite understand the intention behind the intro -Color correction is not consistent. Some shots look faded, some look normal, some look oversaturated -put lower third on the "look space" side of the frame -music is a bit overpowering at times, check your levels\ -Overall, you could use a lot more b-roll of the team playing and practicing.
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