Neuqua Alumni in the NFL - ID# 245
Neuqua Valley
News Package
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A news package on two Neuqua Alumni currently playing in the NFL.
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- 3/3 12:02 pm - The opening stand-up is short and abrupt. It doesn't feel like the on-camera part was necessary if that's all he is going to say. It feels like the player interviewed first tells his own story; I think the reporter could've done that, and had the player talk more about his experiences and emotions, it would've been more effective. Same with the second interview, all they say in the first half of this package is their personal history. The connections they make to the school in the second half of this piece are much better, and I wish I had been more focused. I feel like this story left quite a bit unsaid if you were going to have them being interviewed. How has their life changed, who specifically inspired them, how do they think they made it to the NFL, bigger lessons about hard work and persistence?
- 2/21 2:40 pm - - Great connections, interesting story - Good to have video of the students when they were at Nequa - I thought it was an interesting story but not necessarily a well put together package with a lot of storytelling.
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