Fruit Coat - ID# 249
Lockport Township
Comedic Narrative
Entry Description
A new product to prevent produce from rotting impacts more than just the food it's applied to.
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/23 10:50 am - I really appreciate the swing you took here. This is a pretty high concept idea that probably could use just a little more development. The idea of going behind the scenes of the infomercial, behind the artifice of it all, is really interesting, and I wanted to see more. The ideas about commercialism and preservation are also really interesting for a film. Your camera work, sound and editing all work here. Awesome job on the practical SFX! The big issue is narrative. The concept is present, but is there a story? Developing some more characterization, either with the host, the girl who gets sick, or both might help take this from experimental satire to narrative film. You have some really great ideas here and an aesthetic style ala David Lynch. Keep going! Keep developing your voice!
- 4/22 1:56 pm - Your main actor is great and really sells the product and convinces the audience this is a real commercial. Great job with the various stock photos and the backing track. I love the establishing shot of the studio and the set-up but, in the end, I think you could have had more set shots within the rest of the video. One very specific note, the the audio near the end of the "on set" scene ended abruptly, creating a weird drop sound. As for some improvements, the two actors in the beginning didn’t need to be there as it didn’t make sense why we were hearing someone talk but watching two people sit in chairs. Also, while names are funny, giving people names like Blue and Orange as testimonials without making it part of the joke within the “fruit coat” and having other people with actual names really didn’t make sense. Overall, this was produced really well and I loved the turn at the end where the eaters changed and became rotten. Great work!
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