(Stick) Figuring It Out - ID# 259
Richards High School
Comedic Narrative
Entry Description
This is the short story of Abe coming to a startling revelation.
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/30 4:01 pm - Great simple concept! Very funny for something so simple. Very refreshing to see animation in a category that's mostly live action.
- 4/29 11:49 am - Love this concept and its clever simplicity. The sketchbook style works well to carry the message. Nice use of composition and minor zooms to add variety and mood. The voice acting is good. The editing is well-paced. The story has a good structure and the ending works, both as a joke and as subtext. Lastly, it's cool to see a student film that's drawing-based rather than only live-action. Excellent work here!
Judge 1
Positives: I thought the whole premise of the video was very unique/outside the box. The story was well suited for the format of a short film. The breaking of the 4th wall at the end was clever and funny. Endings short films are hard to pull off in general so kudos. It also provided more visual variety to the short by diverging from the animated style.
Improvements: The overall sound quality could be improved by more specialized recording gear. It wasn't distracting from the story but it sounded a little compressed/low quality. I'd recommend getting a USB microphone. You can get those online for pretty cheap. Some of the music and SFX at times felt a little too loud. Wasn't too big of deal, just needed some slight tweaks so that it doesn't overpower the dialogue.
Judge 2
Positives: It is incredibly hard and time consuming to animated a film using hand drawn cells. Think about how they use to do it back in the old studio days with Disney films? Animators who get burned out. This was def a very noble exercise. Also, the elements of post production, the zooms, the pan, kept the simplicity of the animation interesting. Also, above all else the, the humility at the end of the piece was a bonus to you! Great Job!
Improvements: It would have been neat if you added some addition folly effects, sound, just the supplement the visuals. Also, the story seemed a bit existential. Not much happened, and DIDNT feel any kind of resolution. The story should be above the animation. You could have only three animated film cells, no sound effects, and it would be passable because it’s a great story. Does that make any sense? Because you humbled yourself in the end, and because you added that you still have room to grow, get bonus points from me!
Judge 3
Positives: Excellent job! Consistently funny and engaging throughout. Fun variety of personas for the individual stick figures. Bonus points for the meta nature of this whole thing! Drawing quality definitely doesn't hold you back from making an excellent comedy short!
Improvements: Refining your presentation isn't imperative, as the raw nature of this is a part of its overall charm. That said, it will definitely be helpful to add some more polished stylization to your storytelling arsenal.
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