Stuck - ID# 251
Lockport Township
Comedic Narrative
Entry Description
The door is stuck. How will they escape?
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/23 12:04 pm - You have a lot of potential here. The concept is interesting and the joke works at the end. I might try to vary your shot types a little more. This is a story that could use a little more development. Who are these characters? What do they want and how do they change in their pursuit of that goal? Ask yourself these questions on your next film. There are a lot of interesting ideas that you could explore having your characters locked in a room. Maybe a little score might also be helpful. Keep making movies!
- 4/22 2:09 pm - I really liked the dialogue and the overall script. The agent pounding on the floors was really funny. The escalation of the dialogue was also fantastic. Some points to improve is, first and foremost, changing up the camera angle for reaction shots and giving the audience a break from the wide, medium, two-shots.Also, add some music to set the tone; both for drama and for humor. Keep up the great work!
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