Teddy - ID# 253
Metea Valley
Dramatic Narrative
Entry Description
A short dramatic narrative based on the relationship between a little girl and her mother.
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/25 10:04 pm - Beautifully exposed composed, lit, and graded footage. Great moving shots. Excellent performance from the lead actress (and therefore, great directing!). Impressive attention to sound effects – brings the story more to life; however, the music takes over it a bit and hides the real world sounds at times. Dedicating a bit more time in the beginning to some level of self doubt or conflict – or perhaps a scene showing how much she loves Teddy – would have made the payoff more powerful in the end. Also, perhaps having the music more emotional in the ending could have conveyed the pain of giving up the Teddy – but I understand if you moreso wanted the main character to seem more couragous and confident. A close up of the care and appreciation in the mom's reaction would have made for a more powerful ending than a black screen with the rock music playing. Still, overall, this was very well executed and you did a very impressive job seeing your vision to fruition.
- 2/26 1:42 pm - Your actress is sooo photogenic. I appreciate your consistency in telling the story through the eyes of the character. The camera is always at her eye level and it helps the audience identify with her. You use a variety of shots which helps the audience stay interested. The story itself is touching. Your weakness is sound - you use music a lot instead of sound effects which makes the audience a little wanting.
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