Valentine's Death - ID# 288
Highland Park
Dramatic Narrative
Entry Description
A student receives a curious Valentine's Day note. What happens next is something that she does not expect...
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- 4/24 8:38 pm - Love the use of negative space in the chase sequence to heighten the sense of fear and make the audience question the location of the threat. Overall, thoughtful and dynamic exposure. Strong performances. Would have liked to have gotten to know the character more so as to feel more connected with her before the chase sequence. Use of red works very well with the Valentine's theme. Opening and ending titles are excellent. Some of the camerawork is outstanding. Unfortunately, the stairwell sequence stands out as shaky and over exposed. Overall very cool short film! The big things to work on are blocking, exposure, and having more flushed out characters.
- 3/14 9:54 am - Strong story structure. There is a clear beginning, middle, and end. I like how you use matching shots of the locker and the friends at the beginning and at the end to bring it full circle and indicate that this is a repeating cycle. I would have liked to get to know the characters better before they are killed so that their deaths hit harder. Your use of the color red is really strong. The red lighting looks really nice and works great for this story, as it connects the themes of love and death. But a lot of it was so dark it was hard to tell what was going on so I think the auditorium scenes need to be lit more.
- 2/28 1:20 pm - I love the idea of combining Valentine's Day with death. Your ending is not believable - someone screams and the two girls at the end barely react? There is no story to follow. Love the use of red - blood and roses - very smart - but your camera work could be less shaky.
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