Hungry - ID# 282
Neuqua Valley
Comedic Narrative
Entry Description
A teenager wakes up hungry and has nothing to eat in the house, until he comes up with a brilliant idea...
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/25 2:45 pm - Simple and funny concept. Very relatable. Great performance from the actor. Some scenes were a little longer and could've been trimmed to make the story a little tighter. The shots were a little dark, as well. Great job!
- 4/24 12:11 pm - Good concept. Nice job setting a tone and sticking with it. The story works well without dialogue. The stomach sounds were a bit much and gross at times - once or twice would be fine. Good use of music. Probably a bit too long, considering it's a very simple story. Overall good visual storytelling.
- 4/21 12:41 pm - Good hand-held camera shots at the beginning of the video to catch the viewer's attention. Music selection works well with the images you recorded. Good use of sound effects. Good use of dissolves and point of view camera shots. Editing is well done. Keep producing more videos.
Judge 1
Positives: Not a bad premise for a video. Teenagers, especially boys, always seem to be hungry. Liked all the empty stuff in the fridge. Finding the cupboards bare would have been a good parallel. POT sequence was a good device, though ~24 hours was a little contrived.
Improvements: A little less reliance on the music and maybe adding some of the actor's groans in addition to the sound effects would have helped the melodrama. The pictures and drawings seemed a bit contrived.
Judge 2
Positives: The music, the sound effects and the overacting complimented each other and gave the whole project a slapsticky feel. The clapping on of the lights was a genuinely funny moment as well as the set dressing of the empty fridge.
Improvements: I didn't get it. His brilliant idea was to order pizza? but it took almost a whole day to get there? Also, what was with him pasting pictures of the food and drawing the dominoes logo? It felt like that was leading somewhere but then that storyline was abandoned. There were funny moments but the story didn't seem to really go anywhere. And if time was elapsing... the light coming in through the window should have changed. That was confusing.
Judge 3
Positives: Fun, simple story, with an accurate title! Good playful selections for music. This looks like it was a lot of fun to make! Keep at it.
Improvements: This was a pretty simple A to B narrative. Nothing wrong with that, but seeing as how there isn't much in the way of story, I'd have liked to see a few more gags or funny visuals inserted throughout. The character is also extraordinarily simple in that he didn't seem to understand his own hunger very well. Maybe there was more to do with that. Also, worth commenting that no reasonable person should wait more than 45 minutes for Domino's. I wonder why there was no followup call? He probably shouldn't have paid for that pizza either!
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