Biking Trail - ID# 3
Geneva
News Package
Entry Description
A look at a biking trail built my neighborhood residents
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/25 9:33 pm - Fun package. Some nice storytelling and really nice broll throughout. I really like the shot looking up the tree. Some good quick interviews as well. The reporters mic was only recorded to the left channel. Make sure to fill both channels with audio. Whenever you use footage you didn't shoot, make sure to credit it with an onscreen photo/video credit. I think I get what you were trying to do with your first shot...empty pool, summer is slowing down. But the pool looked like a resort and the transition to woodsy trails was a bit of a disconnect for me. Small thing but I guess my point is...choose your story's establishing shot carefully. Nice work overall.
Judge 1
Positives: I like how you walked the camera through a trail showing us the view point from a biker. I like how you got different ages of people to interview. Lots of different broll I like how you transitioned from the Colorado video to the local video
Improvements: Did you shoot all this video yourself? There seems to be some missing nat sound behind your reporter track, like when the bike went through the water. If you did shoot it all, keep your nats under. The world isn't silent. Make sure to source video you take from other places Where was the random pool at the start of the piece? It seemed really out of place and you could have shown any other shot from the trails
Judge 2
Positives: -Creative shots made for a very unique perspective throughout the piece -Loved the use of natural sound to drive the piece.
Improvements: -The writing was excellent! Very creative. However, I would've loved to hear the reporter narrate the piece with a little more energy. It takes time to find your voice, so don't take this personally. Just try to let your voice drive the piece by diversifying your tone. -I would've also loved to see a reporter stand-up. A way to show presence in the piece.
Judge 3
Positives: - Your camera work here was outstanding! Great job getting a variety of shots to tell the whole story here. I thought the underwater shot was really cool. The differing angles of the trail and bikers navigating it were really entertaining. - You did an excellent job of writing to your video too -- especially at the beginning of the package. Showing the viewer what you are talking about gives you credibility and authenticity. It also helps the viewer understand what's going on.
Improvements: - You included natural sound pops in a few spots, which were great, but you could have done way more! This story is ripe with sound as the bikes pass through the trail. Don't be afraid to use a lot more of that. It breaks up your reporter track and soundbites, and it helps the viewer feel like they are there. - I thought the timelapse of the jump being built didn't really make sense at first. Going back to it later helped to explain it, but it felt out of place at the time. Next time, consider showing whomever was building it and avoiding the timelapse. This could also include some natural sound of the logs being placed.
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