Mountain View Adventure Center Commercial - ID# 305
Maine West
Commercial
Entry Description
This is a commercial for a local mini golf course in Des Plaines, Illinois. The script and concept was created in collaboration with the Des Plaines Park District.
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- 4/26 6:40 am - You show off the mini-golf location very well with your shots, but the majority of the shots are the same. Lots of eye level medium shots here. The fun of this piece happens when you got more creative with your angles and your shots. As far as information about the business is concerned, you cover it all in the voice over, but for a commercial consider adding on screen graphics as well. Think of how folks watch videos these days...lots of time it is without sound on (especially on mobile devices). If that is the case this piece looks good but missing getting the information to the consumer. Timing on this at 44 seconds too is fine, but I think tighter editing could bring it to 30 seconds, which is the standard length for ads (that or 60 seconds). Your music and voiceover mixing, along with your video editing is well done!
- 3/3 2:04 pm - First and foremost, I would like to extend my sincere commendations on your initiative and dedication in producing commercials for a real business. Engaging with actual clients and delivering a product that meets their expectations is a commendable achievement, especially at this stage in your career. It is clear that your efforts have not only provided valuable experience but also contributed positively to your client's marketing endeavors. The inclusion of updates made at the venue within your commercial is a strategic choice, effectively highlighting the improvements and new features that potential visitors can anticipate. This approach not only serves the immediate promotional needs of your client but also demonstrates your ability to focus on key selling points that enhance the appeal of the venue. Moving forward, I encourage you to explore more dynamic production techniques to elevate the overall impact of your commercials. A diverse mix of sounds, including both sound effects and natural audio from the facility, can significantly enrich the viewer's experience. Incorporating ambient sounds or specific activities from the venue can create a more immersive and engaging atmosphere, allowing viewers to feel more connected to the experience being advertised. Additionally, integrating more natural audio captures the essence of the venue in a way that studio-produced sound effects might not always achieve. This authenticity can be particularly compelling for viewers, as it provides a genuine glimpse into the atmosphere and energy of the location. Regarding the structure of your commercial, including relevant information about the park towards the end is an excellent suggestion. This not only ensures that viewers are left with key details about the venue but also serves as a call to action, encouraging them to visit or learn more. Information such as opening hours, upcoming events, or special promotions can be particularly effective in this regard. Ensuring that this information is presented in a clear, concise, and visually appealing manner will enhance the commercial's effectiveness as a promotional tool. As you continue to refine your skills and expand your portfolio, remember that each project offers a unique opportunity to experiment with different techniques and approaches. The feedback and insights gained from these experiences are invaluable, guiding your growth as a content creator. Your willingness to embrace these learning opportunities and push the boundaries of your creative and technical abilities will undoubtedly lead to even more impressive and impactful work in the future.
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