The Raptured - ID# 318
Waubonsie Valley
Dramatic Narrative
Entry Description
"In a world without a trace following the answer to loneliness.” Adam, alone in town without any traces of life goes on a wide search for his friends and mom to know the truth of the sudden disappearance of the people of his town. But what he'll find is not what he expected.
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/23 2:47 pm - Great performance, direction, and set design. Camerawork was shaky and at times out of focus, but the shot selection was thoughtful and impactful. The opening set the stage in an engaging and interesting way. The sound has a decent amount of noise and clothes rustle, but the dialogue and sound effects were recorded well. Sometimes, the music was a bit too loud that it made it difficult to hear the dialogue. In terms of the editing, it was logical and well paced – some of the cross dissolves felt unnecessary. The ending felt just a tad abrupt – even cutting to ending credits could have improved this. What could be interesting if you haven't tried it already, would be to move the opening credits to the ending. This would allow your story to jump start right away and also allow your audience to digest your story in the discomfort of the credit sequence. Overall, nice work!
- 3/24 1:45 pm - You did a great job after this with your camera shots, audio, and editing. Some of your shots were a bit shaky. Good choice with implementing the audio in to bring in more dramatic emotion. To add a bit more, maybe some faster cuts and a point of view camera angle could show the intense fear your main character is feeling since there are more and more people that are gone. This was a strong video, in a strong category!
- 2/22 12:11 pm - The opening shot is very catchy - but there is no payoff. I high-angle shot at the entrance to the school is very effective - the always-watching eye of God. But your camera work needs to attention - your focus is soft and the camera zoom is a little jerky. The story idea is very good. I particularly like the open-ended ending. The microphone placement needs attention - the rustling against the jacket is heard. There are tricks you could use to hide a mic and for it not to be heard.
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