Through Her Eyes - ID# 310
Maine West
Dramatic Narrative
Entry Description
This is a short film about a mother and a daughter working to understand each other's perspectives.
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/22 11:50 am - Sweet and touching story, love the time traveling at the thrift store scene – very creative. Good use of music, props, and great acting. Overall, the sound was clear and well edited – could have used more attention to J and L cuts. In terms of the camerawork, smart and practical compositions. I would have loved to see more of the creativity that was demonstrated in the binoculars scene. The editing was logical and especially well executed in regards to match action and the time traveling. In regards to the story, perhaps some of the moments could have been extended a bit to allow for the audience to sit in them (but I acknowledge this is tricky in short films). Overall, great job!
- 3/19 9:41 am - Pros: I liked how you put this story together! You grabbed my attention right away with your camera switching between the mom and the daughter. Your concept of looking through the lens to the past was a great touch to this story. I feel some of it was a bit long and you could have incorporated more of this element with more glasses/hats/etc. Cons: I feel for these flashbacks, adding some overlay colors or grey could enhance the fact that you are seeing the past with the power of the items you are wearing. The ending sequence did not feel as intimate as it should have been, it looked more like acting than an authentic connection between the mom and the daughter. Maybe a few takes with this interaction could take out some of the nerves of being on camera which could lead to more of an intimate ending to this wonderful story.
- 2/21 1:00 pm - It is a very cute little story and I love that you actually thought of an idea that makes sense for a 5 minute film. There is no "earlier that year" or "the next day" kind of storytelling. I wish you varied your camera angles a little more: for example, when she is in the thrift store, looking across the isle rather than standing in the isle with you. Your biggest problem is not thinking through your cuts: for example, when your binocular scene is over, you cut back to the scene in the thrift store, but your character does not hold the binoculars anymore.
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