Uncanny Valley - Short Film - 2024 - ID# 333
South Elgin
Dramatic Narrative
Entry Description
Perception and opinion collide with reality in this haunting conflict of gender identity. Writer and Director: Kori Loza-Sanchez
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/23 2:53 pm - Very compelling and original premise! The sound was well recorded and edited quite well in a way that supported the story – but sometimes the mix was a bit imbalanced. I would suggest giving a little more attention to the audio levels when editing the sound. The bone sound effects are great. The story was edited with craft in a way that drove the sense of terror and doom. In terms of camera, the exposure (in particular shadows) were a bit off – but I sense that this was intentional for the genre. I would have liked an ending credits to process the story a little longer. Overall, excellent story and performance! Cleaning up the audio mix, exposure in post, and adding credits would bring it to the next level!
- 3/24 2:13 pm - Interesting story here! Great job capturing my attention right away. I would say your lighting could use some work with th bedroom scene as I wasn’t really able to make out the other character. I like what you are going for in this story, I feel it was a great touch with the sound effects for the “pretty” version character. This was Erie to hear and added some fear emotion for me. I would say the addition to the second character on the top of the car was not well done, I feel having this character appear in the rear view mirror instead could add more engagement between the two characters and would make sense as she is trying to look in the mirror to back out of the garage. Having her jump back to the front of the garage didn’t make the most sense here.
- 2/22 1:20 pm - I applaud your Hitchcockian ending. I wish you put the camera on a dolly or a steadicam of some sort to stabilize the shot. The composition of the opening sequence is spectacular: the tight shots and drawing me in. You are also not using music right away. Nice touch. Your POV cutting is not perfect. In the garage, the main character turns her head to face the garage door, but you cut to the doppelganger standing by the door. You've given some serious thought to sound design and the sfx of the bone crackling as the "pretty version" of the main character saves is very creepy (in a good way). You were better off recording the footsteps as the main character is running to the garage. The library foleys are out of sync.
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