Thrifting News Package - ID# 346
Glenbrook North
News Package
Entry Description
How can we help reduce the amount of clothing waste in our community? Here's what students at Glenbrook North are doing.
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 3/13 2:32 pm - Really loved that you left school grounds to do this story. I loved the natural sound and the story was interesting. It was shot nicely and it was good writing to video. The SOTS were a bit long but overall - very nice job!
Judge 1
Positives: - I really like how you told this story. You focused on your character, then pivoted to the event and back to your character. Excellent writing. I like the soundbites you chose too. - You started the package with natural sound of the hangers on the rack and a nice two-shot sequence. This was great!
Improvements: - I want more natural sound! Let's hear the student as he's shopping and making comments on clothes, or the sewing machine going full-blast. Adding little bits of natural sound helps the viewer feel like they are there. - I thought the teacher's interview could have been framed a little better
Judge 2
Positives: -Great to see you personalize the story with Karol at the top of the pkg. It helps people relate to the story. -Great use of natural sound to transition between tracks
Improvements: -The interview with Mrs. Basford could use some lighting --Try to shoot in sequence. Get a wide shot then close up of the same shot to diversify your angles and help the story move along.
Judge 3
Positives: I loved how you covered the larger topic of thrifting by focusing on Karol's story. Telling the story of a single student is much more engaging than just a broad overview. Great job! The transitions in this story were outstanding, very smooth! Not only did you focus on Karol's love of thrifting but you used his story to transition into the fashion and design class, which transitioned to sustainability. And it was a professional touch to end back on Karol!
Improvements: Video b-roll, instead on zooms on still photos, is preferable but I understand this video may not have been available. Very professional piece, and you can take it to the next level by adding in some reporter standup shots.
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