School Based Health Center - ID# 349
Maine West
News Package
Entry Description
This news package covers the new School Based Health Center at Maine West and how it supports health equity for students.
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 3/3 11:57 am - This is great information and you did pick good soundbites. I didn't love that you used 3 in a row at the start that all just laid out some info but that wasn't connected or moved the story forward. The structure of this news package could've been stronger as the pieces are there. The part about going to a doc office as being scary and this center being more safe is an interesting take. Is that how the center is being promoted?? The second soundbite about it being accessible to all seems more appropriate and probably should've led that section. I do like how you talk about how students can access and it is easy. Overall this is pretty solid and I liked it and learned more.
- 2/21 2:40 pm - - The story was informative - The interviews were good - The voice track was strong - The bus shot felt a little long - Interviews were all in same location - 1:52 for this story felt a little long
Judge 1
Positives: - You have a few good sequences here -- like when the student is getting his ear checked. Nice job! - I like that you got so many different perspectives in interviews and wove them together. You did a nice job telling this story.
Improvements: - This story was visually challenging, but I thought there were opportunities to do better. Find things in the room to get tight shots on so that you can use them to avoid jump cuts. The shot variety will make it feel fresh. - Natural sound could have helped the story flow better. We see people talking and interacting. Just using a second or so of that can improve the flow of your story.
Judge 2
Positives: I like that you interviewed multiple people and positioned them with someone that made sense. You don't always have to shoot an interview wide but this showed part of the clinic without being distracting. I like that you took us through the process of what this has to offer and how students can easily get involved
Improvements: Where did you get the picture of Lutheran General Hospital? Make sure to source anything that you take from somewhere else. If you have multiple interviews, try to change up the position so they don't all look the same.
Judge 3
Positives: -Great shots. Each interview subject was framed well during interviews Well written, reporter did a good job narrating the importance of the health center
Improvements: -It would've been great if you interviewed a patient who benefits from the Health Center. The personal stories would add great value to your package. -I would have liked to hear more natural sound.. especially in between transitions, instead of just music.
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