ICE Walkout - ID# 366
Homewood-Flossmoor
News Package
Entry Description
Story on student walkout at HF.
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 3/11 2:29 pm - Nice job covering a tough subject matter! It was a solid news package and you wrote well to video. I would have flip flopped some of your best shots were at the end of your story - instead of the backs of protestors, always try to show more faces. There were also a lot of similar looking shots - go for more closeups in the future. Definitely add more nats but overall, good job!
- 3/5 2:25 pm - great job! Nice balance with the interviews of both stduents and admin. The b-roll is strong. My suggestion would be to add more nats and let them breathe a bit. Natural sound is a priority when covering protests.
Judge 1
Positives: - Great job telling this story! I love that you incorporated so many different voices. The sound bites really add to the story. - Thank you for including natural sound -- whether through chants, music, etc. This helps the viewer feel like they're at this walkout with you.
Improvements: - This story would have benefitted from more sequences and shot variety. When you go to shoot b-roll, always think wide, medium, tight. Those tight shots help you out of jump cuts and help provide details. Think people's facial expressions, close ups on signs, etc. - You have some unnecessary camera movements that distract some from the story. It can be hard to shoot a story like this, so just focus on one thing at a time.
Judge 2
Positives: -I like the use of the reporter's stand-up at the start and end of the story. It provided a strong delivery -Great use of interviews to tell the story
Improvements: -This pkg could use some natural sound as transitions. Example: You could add audio of the protesters chanting in between tracks. -Try to hold the camera still and let the projects move on their own. No need to constantly move the camera.
Judge 3
Positives: I loved the inclusion of so many students' perspectives, the most important part, and including information on the staff's approach to walkout and interview with the associate principal was also interesting. There was a commendable amount of creative b-roll and I liked the style in which it was shot. The way the camera walked with the participants provided energy and felt like the viewer was caught up in the walkout.
Improvements: While this is a solid overview of the walkout, it would have been more engaging with some storytelling. Throughout the piece, you could have woven in the story of one of the participants. Why did they take part, were they worried about the consequences, how did they feel when they saw video of the ICE raids, how did they feel as they took part in the walkout, etc. At around the 1:00 mark, it becomes difficult to hear the reporter's voiceover above the nat audio of the students singing.
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