Bulldog Bistro - ID# 395

Crown Point

News Package

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Entry Description

This package highlights the new Bulldog Bistro Cafe at Crown Point High School.

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Recent Teacher Comments

• 3/3 12:04 pm - To make this a news story, you have to write with non-bias. This felt more like a commercial. Just keep the editorializing out. (E.g. "It ONLY costs..." "Why not come here" etc - all those have to be eliminated) Slow your delivery down a bit. Good start at editing packages, keep at it!
• 2/26 1:41 pm - Open standup is nice, and the reporter is confident. The b-roll here didn't seem smooth. The icee machine also looked to be spitting out liquid in an unappealing way. This started to feel like a promo for the cafe and not a news story. At one point, the audio seems off from the reporter's mouth. Maybe do the rest of the narration for this piece other than the standup in a cleaner audio location?

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