The Good, The Banana, and The Ugly - ID# 40
Deerfield
Comedic Narrative
Entry Description
Sheriff Berry takes on the Banana Brothers, two bandits that try to steal potassium from his mining town.
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- 4/23 5:08 pm - Love this concept. Smart way to avoid using guns in a student film, then really creative expansion of that joke. Great script with plenty of homage and jokes. The shots are well composed and feel appropriate to the concept. The music is perfect. The graphic text is a fun bonus. Good job with the costumes. Overall really well done and fun to watch!
- 4/23 3:24 pm - This was written really well. I loved all the puns! I think the quality and color is really good. It's a very simple idea that's executed well. The only not that I have is that some of the lighting is a little dark on some of the close ups.
- 4/21 10:27 am - Music selection works well with the images you recorded. Great Close-Up camera shots at the beginning of the video. Editing is well done. Great use of Close-Up camera shots throughout the video. Great use of sound effects. Good variety of different camera angles. Great low angle camera shot at 2 minutes. Great Comedic Narrative video. Very well done. Keep producing more videos.
Judge 1
Positives: Great title and great opening shot as the hero walks out of darkness into the light. You made really good use of close-ups to parody the classic western duel. Actors were fun to watch. All the produce name references were clever. The plot is a bit of a stretch and the ending stretched it further.
Improvements: Making a bigger deal out of mention of the Deranged Plantain at the beginning, adding some foreshadowing would have helped the ending have more punch.
Judge 2
Positives: The story was fun to watch from start to finish. The dialogue was funny and spoken well by the actors. The ridiculousness of the plot allowed us to not take it too seriously and allowed the story to go wherever it wanted without us questioning it. An old west showdown with bananas. Even just typing that made me smile.
Improvements: the story lost some steam around 1:57. The Deranged Plantain's big reveal felt like it didn't live up to the rest of the comedic dialogue. And maybe I'm being a little too picky here but when he ate some of the banana and threw the rest, I was REALLY hoping that it was supposed to be a grenade. Kinda felt let down at that point. But really, there isn't too much to criticize here. I enjoyed it thoroughly!
Judge 3
Positives: This was not only a really funny short comedy narrative, but it did a really great job capturing a lot of the tropes associated with your average Western. Doing a convincing job representing that is very important to the quality of the story unfolding here. The script, the sound design, the location, the use of the bananas, all on point. The Deranged Plantain. Brilliant! Such great work, all around.
Improvements: Not much to say here besides nitpicks and personal preferences. I think this was more or less exactly what it needed to be, considering the length. That said, I suppose if I had to suggest anything, it might be to insert a couple smaller gags in the middle section on the way to your brilliant conclusion. But I'd say just save that for the sequel! This was fantastic work. I hope you are very proud of it.
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