The Story of John Sardine - ID# 403
Riverside Brookfield
Comedic Narrative
Entry Description
A noir Detective gets a slightly out-of-the-ordinary client, with a slightly out-of-the-ordinary request.
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- 4/30 4:04 pm - Fun concept. The shot with the fish client is very dark, so I had to watch it a few times to understand that they were in the shot and understand what exactly was going on. All the shots could've been a bit brighter to help understand what was going on, especially on first watch. Great puns!
- 4/29 8:48 am - Overall funny concept. The shots look nice, especially the opening shot with the blinds shadow effect. The voice-over actor works great, much better than a student would have. Good job using a narration to carry the imagery. As a story, this has potential, but as it is, this feels way too short, and ultimately disappointing to the viewer because of that. You have a really strong setup, style, and hook... and then it's over. If this was a complete story, and not just a quick visual joke, this would have been one of my favorite in this category. Don't be afraid to follow through with good ideas.
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