Skeleton Ruler - ID# 417
Highland Park
Dramatic Narrative
Entry Description
Two students who cannot stand each other are forced to work together on a school project. They get disagree on measurement practices and it turns into a dramatic face off.
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- 4/25 12:04 pm - In the opening shot, it is unclear what those boxes in the background have to do with the story. It is challenging in student work, but having extras in the background of the classroom scene would help immensely with the world building and believability. The dialogue could use help from J and L cuts and was often quite inaudible, but the sound design in regards to the effects were very entertaining, unexpected, and fun – nice job there! The exposure was a bit low, could have used lighting or a slight boost in post. The camerawork in the hallway was dynamic and engaging in a way that told and reinforced the story. Unfortunately, it was challenging judging this in comparison to the 5 minute short films in this category because the story was a bit rushed in contrast. The text/titling looks like you used the first options in Premiere – a little more effort and attention to detail with the titling goes a long way in a short film. Overall, despite it's flaws, this was a ton of fun to watch – and that counts for a lot! Keep up the good work and pay more attention to the little details in the background.
- 2/23 1:37 pm - The fight sequence works really well because of the variety of shots you used and the way you edited that sequence. Close-ups for fights work every time! Everything else about your story is an excuse for the fight, which makes it a little gratuitous (unnecessary). I'm talking about how you introduce your characters and how you resolve your story. Your sound needs some love and attention!
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