Another Job Well Done - ID# 425
Glenbrook South
Comedic Narrative
Entry Description
Two Brothers go to work, only to discover...they have no idea what they're doing.
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/23 12:07 pm - Awesome, fun, funny movie! The performances were great. Well thought out photography and camera work. Really great soundtrack and sound design. The story is simple and easy to follow. One thing that might bring your story to the next level would be to try and incorporate some more lighting design. Typically, you don’t see highly sophisticated lighting setups in comedies, but in this case, it might help elevate the spookiness of the location, which would make the furby even more ridiculous. Really nice job all around! Keep it up!
- 4/22 2:14 pm - This was a lot of fun to watching. I particularly liked your introduction to the characters along with the accompanying music bed. Adding a drone shot as well as close-up's really piqued my interest and had me invested from the jump. As for specifics, you all have some amazing prop work, from the pvc pipe to the POV monster shots, your work within the warehouse and the elements you used to create this world was not lost on me. Great effort and execution. Your cinematography was also a lot of fun and probably the strongest technical component, I really appreciated the steadiness of your movement shots as well as the variation of shots to show the scene and tell the story. Keep up the great work!
Judge 1
Positives: Great editing, tons of a fun and laughs to be had in this short film! I appreciated that the nonverbal character underwent a change int eh brief window of time we had with him! There was a particularly fancy overhead (drone?) shot in the intro I was was very impressed by. The editing and feel of that sequence in general was very well constructed. I love the little things like the laser pointer through the smoke.
Improvements: I may have recommended inserting some more dialogue between the two main characters to flesh out their relationship a bit more. Also, perhaps some payoff at the end with the woman who contracted their services would've added to the humor and overall narrative.
Judge 2
Positives: Love the aspect ratio! I wish more people would adopt the practice. Immediately legitimitizes the whole thing. The project is shot very well, with interesting lighting and camera work and a great explosion composite shot at the end. Fantastic use of costumes and props. I do art department for a living so seeing how much care you put into the props means a lot. And when the silent guy stole the Aqua Velvet, I laughed out loud.
Improvements: Pacing could have been tighter. A lot of shots went too long and could have used quicker cuts. As much as I loved the little furby doll thing, the gag didn't really hit like it was supposed to. Could have used a few shots where the doll actually moved or talked or something. Just to show it was alive. At 3:46 there is a 180 degree camera shift... that rarely (more like never) ever works and instead ends up distracting from the action because it messes with the viewer's mind. But overall, I enjoyed this project quite a bit!
Judge 3
Positives: i love the over the top comedy, the tone was super clear the entire time. i think your editing and sound design is very strong. it's clear you're inspired by a lot of 2000's comedies and your script works perfectly for that.
Improvements: i don't think the beginning title sequence was effective. i think a punchy title card would've added more to the comedic opening. i think the cinematography could be explored a lot more to add to the hilarity of these characters. more wide lens close up's to emphasize the ridiculous glasses/costume of the lead characters would add a lot more style to it.
Judge 4
Positives: The vibe of the opening scene if great! Camera angles, mode of moving the cameras, and music choice sells a cohesive vibe. Great location! It sells the story super well, 75% of the work as a filmmaker is location, if you don't have to fight it can do wonders. Great personification of the monster using sound! The music always carried the story and serviced the visuals well.
Improvements: Some of the shots could benefits from better framing. It's okay to breakout the tripod and focus on framing over a gimbal. The scene around 3 minutes needs to focus on what's in the frame, are the actors in or out of frame? That's certainly a issue with a 2.39 aspect ratio.
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