The Getaway - ID# 423
Glenbrook South
Dramatic Narrative
Entry Description
Three teenage girls venture to a cabin to get away from the stressors of online bullying, however, a ghost story seems to come to life. This scary story however ends with heartwarming resolution.
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- 4/23 9:45 am - Endearing and very engaging story with dynamic characters. Strong performances and interesting camerawork (such as the very cool moving dutch angle at 1:59). Some details, such as the car not moving at 3:55 with the over-the-top car sound effects took me out of it. Nice use of sequences as a means for transitions. But overall, a delightful short with strong performances. Things to improve on: audio transitions – utilize more J & L cuts; audio levels (be sure to have dialogue peaking at a consistent volume, at times it is too quiet); Outro credits with the cool titling and then background of them singing is such a solid idea – definitely recommend putting more effort into the font of the rolling text. Personal side note – love the Yeah Yeah Yeahs Montage! – I think it could have helped if it was a bit longer, allowing the audience to sit in the moment. Overall, entertaining and thoughtful storytelling! Fine-tuning the audio and a few other touches could bring this to the next level.
- 3/15 11:45 am - I like the plot twist of them being in the wrong house because of a typo and not reading the next message. I think you need to establish more about the social media drama and what's going on there. It seems like there is a lot of backstory to what these girls are fighting about that and it needs to be more clear on screen. At times, it seemed like the cinematography wasn't planned out enough. Think about camera placement and how that can help you tell the story, rather than just placing the camera anywhere just to get coverage of the scene. Nice shot at 2:33 - this is probably your strongest shot in the film. The light from the phone flashlight is too strong around 1:22. I think the intensity can be lowered on the iPhone. You have a great location and it feels really isolated like a remote cabin in the woods.
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