Phone PSA - ID# 430

Homewood-Flossmoor

Public Service Announcement

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Entry Description

Spend time with your loved ones, time doesn't stop when you are on the phone.

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Recent Teacher Comments

Judge 1

Positives: 1) actors did a nice job 2) sound track 3) overall concept

Improvements: 1) graphics at close weak 2) better lighting 3) might have worked better as a :30 psa

Judge 2

Positives: Definitely got the feeling the young man was not "plugged in to reality" given his actions and lack of specificity in his dialogue. The back and forth shots of the two characters conveyed a good, close intimate setting.

Improvements: Was hard to feel sympathetic towards the young man for his situation (and maybe that was the point but I felt the absence of that was a shortfall). Storyline was disjointed in that there was no hint of the man leaving, not even with a throwaway line, even if the young man didn't hear it because he was distracted (dialogue as a whole seemed stiff).

Judge 3

Positives: 1) Actors both felt believable and gave good performances 2) The camera work was clear and good quality

Improvements: 1) The call to action was a little confusing, more clear language or tagline would help 2) End felt a little too abrupt

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