Campions Against All Odds - ID# 433
Metea Valley
Documentary
Entry Description
A short documentary about the Metea Valley High School girl's volleyball team and the journey through their season.
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/25 8:37 am - A dramatic and emotional opening. Once we get into the documentary following the cold open, a lot of the footage is quite shaky and would be more effective if you included the nat sound underneath the b-roll. You limit yourself to sound bites, voice over, and music rather than sound and that sound of the players and so on that can really push this forward. An exciting story and tribute to the team
- 4/15 9:53 pm - Keepers: Nice interview setups. The use of 3 point lighting really pulled a nice image for you. The broll shots you captured are varied and really immerse the viewer into the world of high school volleyball. Well done there. Your use of music is also good. I loved the variety of the songs. Improvements: Work on the pacing of your edit. The transition from the sizzle introductory tease to the body of the documentary was so abrupt, it felt like a mistake. The same thing happens with a sound byte around 1:58. For your setter interview, make sure you're following the rule of thirds. For the next interview there is too much head space. Make sure you're adjusting the shot each time a new person sits in that chair! The biggest note I have is that the whole documentary needed more natural sound within it. You have phenomenal broll...why not use some of its natural sound to bring that aspect into the piece. Sound is such a huge part of story and all of that footage has sound that adds to the story. We finally get some of that later on in the piece, but it needed to be more consistent throughout. Work on intercutting your interviews so we have a mix of voices talking to us, as opposed to one voice followed by one voice followed by one voice, etc. Overall, the elements are all there from production which is huge. Editing just needs more polish and practice to take this to the next level. Good work! Keep working and developing your craft!
- 3/4 6:42 pm - +Lots of b-roll of games and practices which is good +I like the behind-the-scenes feel of the doc -a zoom in to "athletics" would have been better at the beginning because we are supposed to be getting closer to the story. -abrupt transition from title to first interview in terms of audio -hip hop music randomly starts in the middle of coach interview
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