E1H Voice Compendium - ID# 454
Highland Park
Documentary
Entry Description
Interview with custodian Juan Labra at Highland Park High School.
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- 4/28 8:56 pm - + I think it is a cool idea to tell the story of a staff member who may not normally get the spotlight, good b-roll of him at work -Seem more like a news package rather than a documentary due to the VO, needed more interviews than just the main subject.
- 4/6 8:42 pm - KEEPERS: Nicely narrateed story. Your interview set ups with Juan are well done. The music matches the tonal quality of the story you're going for and this has good foundational elements for a documentary. IMPROVEMENTS: This needed other voices than just Juans and voice over. I really wanted to hear from at least two other people. Perhaps an interview with a family member and a colleague or with a colleague and another student? Other voices were needed to tie this together. The voice over needed to be cut down significantly. Ominipotent voice over is an important tool for an expository style documentary, but since you have access to the primary source (Juan) have him do the talking. Use voice over only for transitional and interstitial purposes. In terms of broll, I wanted to see footage of the school during the day when students are present. This would give better juxtaposition to what Juan has to do on the day-to-day and who his efforts ultimately serve. Overall, this had some good storytelling but work on getting other voices into this story and use those voices to further craft the story. Keep working!
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