Drowned - ID# 454
Shepard High School
Dramatic Narrative
Entry Description
There's danger lurking beneath the waters in the school pool.
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 4/25 10:08 pm - Creepy and interesting! The lighting in the locker room was a bit inconsistent with white balance and camera shake issues. The pool scenes were well shot, colored and exposed! I would suggest having having the creepy music in the beginning – however, ironically, it makes the ending less scary. Allowing the audience to hear the struggling to stay above water would be much more unsettling than overly dramatic music. It's tough judging this in comparison to 5 minute short films because this leaves me wanted more story and conflcit than just the scary act of drowning. Having the film start with a scene where we get to know the main character would have made the ending more intense and memorable. Great performance!
- 2/26 2:09 pm - I wish you spent a little more time developing the story. An invisible ghost is a little ... convenient and gratuitous. I do love the very long shot of the "ghost." Your camera work is fine, but using a larger variety of shots would add visual interest. The music is a little over the top and it does not match the visual style of your film. Yes, it creates mood, but so do sound effects and thoughtful sound design.
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