Unhinged - ID# 457
Shepard High School
Dramatic Narrative
Entry Description
What you don't see CAN hurt you. A young man becomes unhinged when he is home alone. Or is he?
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- 4/22 8:03 pm - There is something so universal (among movie viewers) of for some reason believing that the world is scarier and more dangerous just after watching a scary movie – very fun portrayal of this! Strong performances, and the editing cleanly supported the story. The glitchy effect felt out of place – I don't think you needed it, but if you were to use it, it would have felt more appropriate if the main character was watching something on glitchy VHS. The sound effects and music were overall solid. The ending was a bit abrupt, and I'm not sure this was the best title for the film. I would recommend something more directly related to watching scary movies. As you may guess, it is difficult to judge this in comparison to 5 minute shorts with more clear endingn. Still, overall, this very creative – nice work!
- 3/19 10:09 am - Good use of the black and white sequence for this video, it added a nice touch to the horror theme you are going for. I will say that it seemed to be more of a movie trailer to me and seemed unfinished when you got to the end. The fight scenes lacked realism and drew me out of your story.
- 2/21 2:05 pm - The B&W, noir film look mirroring the film your character is watching - nice touch! I wish you did not use music right away, but let the sound of the film establish the scene and the mood. I also wish you had more of a variety of shots in your story. It might be easier to tell the "ghost" type of story using CU and let the audience be the judge of "who was that?"
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