Santa on the Green - ID# 464
Richards High School
News Package
Entry Description
This is a news feature highlighting the holiday community event, Santa on the Green.
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Recent Teacher Comments
- 3/3 12:09 pm - -Loved the background music, the nats and b-roll. - Framing looks very professional too. Cute story. Very well done! My only tip - do your standups on location to make it more interesting.
- 3/3 12:08 pm - This is a very solid package with nicely written tight narration and well framed interviews that push the story forward. The visuals match and enhance the story and are paced well. I love the Grinch interview. There is just a good vibe to this story. Maybe a little more on how this event came to be. It feels like you could've used more nat sound.
- 2/21 2:41 pm - - Great camera work, good quality and creative shots - Cute interview with the Grinch - Needed some more nats
Judge 1
Positives: - This is so cute! Great job getting good interviews. I thought the Grinch one worked really well in this story, and I like how you wrote around it. - Nice job with the camera! You caught a lot of good moments on camera. That's what really makes this story.
Improvements: - You do not need music for this story. Next time, look for ways to get natural sound. That can be as simple as putting a lavalier mic on someone as they go through and hear/see their reactions. Then, use little bits and pieces of that to break up your reporter track/sound. - Getting more sequences would help your story flow better. When you're shooting video, think wide, medium, tight. Then, incorporate those while you're editing to piece it together.
Judge 2
Positives: I like that you did your stand up in front of a Christmas tree and somewhere that made sense to the story. I like that you kept the story shorter and not too long. You can tell a whole story without going too long.
Improvements: I know you wanted the festive background music, but make sure it doesn't distract from the story. It was hard to hear the interviews over the music. I would have loved to hear from a family or a kid that attended the event. The zoom on the interviews/stand ups looks like a jump cut rather than something creative.
Judge 3
Positives: -Loved the creative writing! Especially the tracks around the grinch. --All interview subjects are framed well, audio sounds great.
Improvements: -It would've been great if you interviewed a family who was enjoying the event. The personal stories would add great value to your package. -I would have liked to hear more natural sound.. especially in between transitions, instead of just music.
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